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Some people say that when on holiday in a foreign country, the best way to get to know the people and their country is by staying in a hotel. What is your opinion about this?

Some people
preffer
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prefer
 staying in a
hotel
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 in other countries when
have
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they have
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a
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apply
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holidays than
another
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other
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places
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 as
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hostel
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hostels
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or
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, or
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airbnb
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 or etc,
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becouse
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because
 it is more
comun
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common
on
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in
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 the world do you do booking and it is more
confortable
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comfortable
. But in my
opinion
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opinion,
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this
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 idea now is more different
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becouse
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because
 many people have a lot
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options
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of options
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 for that. It is
importan
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important
know
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to know
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 what
is
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apply
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a
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the
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 new
options
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for
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are for
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 your
make
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apply
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decision
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overall
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; overall
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exist
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are
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 a lot
good
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of good
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options
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for
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available for
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 that. On the firts hand when do you do booking
hotel
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 you need have a lot money
becouse
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 sometimes it is expensive becose
this
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hotel
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 have a differents activities and
places
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 for that reason it probably your cost,
for example
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 hotels as marriott or other have more activities, good service, good food etc, but it is expensive
this
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 one it is very good if you need relaxing and exclusivity. On the
second
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other
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hand
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hand,
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 it is
importan
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important
 you know other
options
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 and you need
know
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to know
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 what it is
a
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the
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 offer
in
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is in
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this
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 country
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becouse
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because
 you
try
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can try
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pay
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to pay
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 less if you take a
dessition
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decision
for
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to
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use
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hostel
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a hostel
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 or
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airbnb
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Airbnb
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becouse
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because
is
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it is
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more easy
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easier
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 and
use
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 a envayroment
familier
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friendly
. It is a good option when
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travel
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travelling
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 alone
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becouse
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because
 you can
meeting
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meet
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a
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apply
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new people and enjoy
in
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apply
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this
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these
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places
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. It is
commun
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common
have
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to have
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pool
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a pool
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 and play rooms in
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this
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these
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places
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you
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where you
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do
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can
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 relax.
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overall
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Overall
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in
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, in
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Airbnb
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airbnb
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airbnb,
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 it is a good idea when
need
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you need
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 more calm
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becouse
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because
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use
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you use
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 a family house for your time. In
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conclusion
conclution
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conclution,
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 it is the most
importan
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important
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this
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in this
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contex
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context because
becouse
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 if you
travel
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 alone
it
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, it
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 good option
hostel
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is sheap
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sheap
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cheap
but
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, but
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 if you
travel
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 for
bussines
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business
 or study
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, it
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it
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it's
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 more
confortable
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comfortable
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airbnb
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Airbnb
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and
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, and
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finaly
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finally
 you
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travel
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travelling
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 with your family is better
a
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than a
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hotel
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. For that reason
in
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, in
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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preffer
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prefer
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hostel
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a hostel
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, it is very nice for my life and
this
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enviroment
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environment
 is cool.
IEnjoy everitime
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I enjoy every time
 when
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travel
Use the right word
travelling
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 and
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use
Wrong verb form
using
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 those
places
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.

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content
Plan what you will say. State your view at the start. Then give two ideas with simple examples.
cohesion
Use easy join words to link ideas. Words like first, also, but, because, so can help the flow.
language
Check big grammar and spelling. Use short, easy sentences you know well.
content
The essay shows some idea on why people may choose hotels or other stays.
structure
The writer tries to show both sides and to give a final view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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