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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
a
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 world pineapple exports by the top three producing countries in 2009 and 2019
and
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, and
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 the pie chart demonstrates a breakdown of the price of
the
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one pineapple in 2019.
Overall
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, the export of fruit shows a big difference in all three countries between the years. In 2009, the pineapples
producing
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produced
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 in country B
was
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were
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 in
the
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first place
of
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among
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 all three and
was
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were
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 equal to
the
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apply
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5
million
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 metric
tones
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tonnes
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, but it
slighlty
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slightly
fall
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 to the near 2
million
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 tonnes in 2019. The country A sold only 1
million
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 tonnes in 2009,
in contrast
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 to the second data point, where
this
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 index
extrmely
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extremely
 reached the 11
million
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,
that
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which
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 makes it the leader of the others. The rate in country C was the lowest
through
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throughout
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all
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the time and did not increase a lot, from
the
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approximately 0.5 in 2009 to
the
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a
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 mere 1 in 2019. The biggest part of
cost
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the cost
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 of each fruit constitutes the distribution and retail - 35 per
cent
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,
while
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 the smallest - export price,
that
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which
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tottaled
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totalled
tine
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4 per
cent
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.
Producer
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The producer
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 takes a little more, the 5 per
cent
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 of all value. The import license and delivery
almost
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are almost
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 the same rate, 10 and 12 per
cent
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 respectively.
A one-fifth
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One-fifth
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 of all goes to profit, and the least 16 per
cent
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collects
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is collected
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the
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by the
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 government for taxes.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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