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It is believed that people who read for pleasure develop their imagination more and acquire better language skills compared to people who preferinter watching television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that learn many languages can help
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a better
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 people think that reading can improve their language
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 people think watching television and movies can improve their language
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weakness
The view in the essay is not clear. State if you agree or disagree in one clear sentence in the introduction.
structure
Make a plan before you write: 4 lines offer, 2 body parts, then a short finish.
clarity
Keep ideas simple and be sure you explain each idea. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
evidence
Give one or two strong examples to show your point. Use simple real life ideas.
coherence
Link your ideas with easy words like first, next, also, but, however.
accuracy
Check your spelling and grammar. Short sentences are easier to read than long ones.
content
The essay shows a balance of points about both sides.
structure
There is an attempt to give a final view.
effort
Some examples and ideas are present in the text.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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