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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

The best way to solve traffic congestions is to provide free public transport 7/24.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The humanity
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Humans have
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 always needed
transportation
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.Since
wheel
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the wheel
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was invented
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invented
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invented,
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 we can use
transportation
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 actively.Because by
walking
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walking,
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 it would take decades to go
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from a
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a
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one
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 place to another
one
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apply
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. When cars were
finally
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 invented,it was time for a change for
whole
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the whole
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 society.Everyone had a car
and
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, and
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 that actually caused a
bad
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negative
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factor
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impact
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to
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on
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the
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apply
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nature.It was air pollution.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 it
also
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 created noise pollution.For the
community
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community,
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 the con was the traffic congestion
which
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, which
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 still happens occasionally.It
got
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has
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 lots of causes
but
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, but
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 they thought about
transportations
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transportation
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 like bus,subway or train
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. its
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its
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It's
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 one of the
most smart
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smartest
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decision
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decisions
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 that humanity has ever made
in
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, in
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 my opinion.Because the thing
is
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is,
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 students
has
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have
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 an age limit for a driving
lisence
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license
,and there are adults
which
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who
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 can not afford
for
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apply
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a car.So it's more
economic
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economical
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 and useful than buying or waiting ages for a proof document for driving.If we step up to the main
question
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question,
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i
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I
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 think
transportation
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 has to be 7/24.Because it will not only end the traffic congestion,it will
also
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helps
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help
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 to end the noise and air pollution.I fully agree with the 7/24
project
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project,
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 it
have
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has
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 to be implemented or it will be harmful for
the
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apply
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nature and
the
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apply
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human health.It will help the
governments
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government's
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 financial issues and
for
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apply
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the
citizens
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citizens'
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 budget. In conclusion,
7/24
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the 7/24
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 project is needed for the world and
the
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apply
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society that
needs
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need
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 for having
an
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apply
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easier
transportation
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 and
basic
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a basic
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 life.It has to be implemented immediately
in
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, in
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 my opinion.

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task
State your view clearly in the first part and keep it steady through the essay.
task
Give more facts and details to back up points and show how they can cut traffic or save money.
coherence
Use more join words to show how ideas link from one paragraph to the next.
coherence
Make each paragraph have a clear main idea and end with a sentence that links to what is next.
language
Fix big errors in spelling and grammar; use short, clear sentences.
strength
The essay shows a clear view that 7/24 transport can be good.
strength
It gives reasons like pollution and cost.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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