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The chart below shows the percentage of population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
THE BAR CHART PROVIDES KEY INFORMATION ABOUT THE DAILY CONSUMPTION OF FRUITS AND VEGETABLES IN
UNITED
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 KINGDOM DURING 2002, 2006 AND 2010. THE UNITS ARE MEASURED IN PERCENTAGES. AT FIRST GLANCE, WOMEN’S CONSUMPTION WAS THE MAJOR DURING THE WHOLE PERIOD.
ACCORDING TO
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 WHAT IS SHOWN IN THE CHART IN 2002, MEN EXPERIENCED 22% OF SPENDING IN THE SAME CATEGORY,
WHILE
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 WOMEN’ AND CHILDREN’S SPENDING WAS 25% AND 11% RESPECTIVELY. THE
CONSUMPTIONS
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CONSUMPTION
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 OF FRUITS AND VEGETABLES IN THE UK THROUGHOUT 2006 WAS 28% FOR MEN ,WHICH INCREASED BEFORE DECREASING TO 24% BY 2010. THE SAME CASE WITH WOMEN SPENDING
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 WAS 32% IN
2006
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2006,
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THEN
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 DROPPED TO 27% IN 2010. WITH REGARD TO CHILDREN, WHO HAVE THE LOWEST PROPORTION IN
THIS
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 GRAPH, THEIR SPENDING WITNESSED AN INCREASE BY 16% IN 2006, BEFORE DECREASING TO 14% IN 2010.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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