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In the past, people ate local food in season. Nowadays, people buy a variety of food from all over the world. Does it advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, an increasing number of individuals have a propensity to consume international
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 rather than locally produced products. Some critics claim that
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 trend brings several drawbacks,
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 as increased carbon footprint and slowing down local businesses.
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, I strongly believe that its benefits, including ensuring
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 security and the improvement in nutrition, far outweigh its disadvantages. One of the most significant benefits of consuming international
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 is that it ensures
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 security.Agricultural production is often vulnerable to climate change, seasonal shortages, and natural disasters, which can disrupt local supply chains.
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, Kazakhstan heavily depends on imported products during
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the winter
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 period.
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 aeroponic technology offers cultivation of fruits and vegetables in winter, it is insufficient to meet people's basic dietary needs.
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 illustrates the significance of imported
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 in preventing
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 shortages and price inflation.

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task
Add a clear ending that restates your view and sums up both sides of the argument.
task
Discuss at least one disadvantage and give a simple way to fix it or to show how its effect can be reduced.
coherence
Use more linking words to show contrast and compare ideas in a simple way.
content
Give 2 or 3 clear examples and explain why they matter to your argument.
language
Check grammar and spelling in each sentence to be clear.
content
The essay has a clear view that imports help avoid gaps in food
example
It gives a real example from a country with winter needs
coherence
Main idea is kept in the writing
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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