IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to local council. In your letter Give details how you and your friends or family use the centre Explain why the sport and leisure centre is important for the local community Describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to express my displeasure about the closure of the sports and training
centre
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. I believe that the
centre
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 has contributed greatly to the community , and it would be a mistake to close it . One of the major contributions of the
centre
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 is the promotion of healthy living. The
centre
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 provides a safe place where
people
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 can come and discuss
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 being active about their health and life in general. It
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 promotes
people
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 of all ages to be active and healthy through their gym , pool , fitness class and football matches.
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 , my family and I always visit the
centre
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 four times a week because of the programs and activities it offers.
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, if
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centre
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 is closed, there won't be any place to promote healthy living and exercise for
people
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 of all ages. It
also
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 removes the sense of belonging for many locals.
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, it would increase the unemployment rate in the country because many
people
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 would lose their jobs
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 its closure.
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, I think sports and leisure centres have significantly contributed to the economy by promoting a healthy lifestyle, job opportunities and a sense of belonging to locals. These benefits should not be overlooked , but appreciated. I would like to ask if the council could find other ways ,
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 as new investors, to save the
centre
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. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your reply Yours faithfully, Adekunbi

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structure
Use one main idea in each paragraph. Put usage, value, and effects each in its own paragraph.
grammar
Make sentences clear. Short sentences are easier to read.
editing
Check spelling and spaces near commas. Use a consistent spelling (centre).
content
The letter shows you care about the local area.
support
You give a real example of how you use the centre.
tone
The tone is polite and respectful.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local
  • council
  • centre
  • people
  • community
  • health
  • sport
  • leisure
  • family
  • friends
  • use
  • gym
  • swim
  • class
  • club
  • money
  • save
  • cost
  • plan
  • option
  • keep
  • close
  • job
  • town
  • travel
  • time
  • impact
  • activity
  • meet
  • safe
  • young
  • old
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