In some countries, birth rates are falling and experts say that by 2050 these countries will have far more adults aged 65 and over than children under 15. What problems might this cause in the future? Can anything else be done to solve this issue?

It is estimated that, by the year 2050, the number of

new borns

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will have declined, and

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will

outweight

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outweigh

the population of

elderlies

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the elderly

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over the teenagers.

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this

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can bring many bad effects to the countries that are dealing with

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issue. Here are some of the problems which may happen regarding it.

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, when the younger generation falls behind

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the older ones

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number

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, it will affect the

work force

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significantly. As the people over 65 are mostly

unfunctional

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, and cannot do much for their homeland.

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, they are more likely to fault at their age.

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, if the experts of a firm are not replaced with the fresh ones, the company will suffer from the

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the older

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have

made

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due to

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the lack of vision or

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abilities.

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although

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the youngsters are not as wise and experienced as the

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older

, they

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people, they

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can figure things out more interestingly. As they are full of fascinating ideas, and will come up with outstanding theories

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apply

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that will come true in no time. To give you an idea, suppose you are testing out two individuals, one over 65, and the other less than 15 years old. If you ask them how to stop the pipe from leaking, the latter is more likely to think of a permanent, creative

soultion

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solution

compared to the other. He might say that it should not only be replaced with a new one, but should

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checked for the reason that led to

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issue.

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, some

coutries

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countries

are seeking refugees and immigrants who are aged less than 35, to fix

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problem. Other territories are spreading public awareness about the consequences

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and are motivating their residents to bring new children

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into

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their families.

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, the government should

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build the requirements and facilities to

nuture

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nurture

healthier, happier, and more intelligent children who are willing to serve their hometown.

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Oct 2, 2025

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Task Response

The essay covers the topic and gives some problems and ways to fix. But the plan is not very clear. State a clear main idea or position and then give reasons and examples to back it up.

Coherence and Cohesion

The writing often moves from one idea to another without clear links. Use simple connect words (and, but, so, therefore, also) and keep one idea in each paragraph. A short introduction and a short conclusion help the reader.

Task Response

The writer shows a broad idea of aging and its effects on society.

Coherence

Some attempt at comparing generations and providing examples.

Task Response

There is a sense of topic and some plan to discuss problems and solutions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

319 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Demographic shifts
Dependent population
Population pyramid
Healthcare provision
Pension schemes
Labor force
Economic sustainability
Generational equity
Immigration policies
Fertility incentives
Retirement reforms
Life expectancy
Workforce participation
Social security
Aging population
Birth rates
Technological innovation
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In some countries, birth rates are falling and experts say that by 2050 these countries will have far more adults aged 65 and over than children under 15. What problems might this cause in the future? Can anything else be done to solve this issue?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think it is better for children to being to learn a foreign language at primary school than at secondary school. What’s your opinion? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries, birth rates are falling and experts say that by 2050 these countries will have far more adults aged 65 and over than children under 15. What problem might this cause in the future? Can anything be done to solve this issue?

Plagiarism in the academic world has become a pressing problem in many countries today. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

Some people prefer to buy local commodities, while other think that world wide products have a better quality. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.