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Band 5

Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the amount you have to pay in insurance for your car each month. You are not happy about this. Write a letter to your insurance company. In your letter explain Why you are writing to them Why you think the insurance should not be increased What you want them to

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction
of
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recent
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the recent
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 change in
amount
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the amount
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 of
insurance
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 that
i
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I
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am
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have been
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 paying
from
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last
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the last
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 10 years. First of all,
i
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I
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 am your loyal customer since 2015, and
i
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I
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 always pay my
insurance
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 payment on time without any delay.
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, I never had any accident or any type of claim ,which can
effect
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 my
insurance
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 cost. I think increasing my payment
20
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by 20
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% is not
good
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a good
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prospective
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 towards my
loyality
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loyalty
.
Furthermore
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, I
also
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 have proper coverage of
insurance
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 and
i
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I
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 have
my all
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all my
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vaild
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valid
 documents , which
represnt
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represent
 my all history of driving
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history, you
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, you
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. You
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 can
also
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chcek
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check
 my record
of
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past
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the past
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 ten years without any
claim
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claims
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.
Apart from
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this
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, other companies are providing me better
option
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options
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 with appropriate
offer
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offers
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 just because
off
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of
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 my clear driving record, but I still want
stay
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 with your
insuarnce
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insurance
 company. Kindly do not increase my
insurance
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 charges and
chcek
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check
 my past history and
loyality
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loyalty
 with your company. I hope you will provide my best offers
and
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i
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I
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 am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, kim kanda

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improvement
Make your main ask clear. Say exactly what you want the company to do, for example not to raise the price, or to offer a lower rate.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start a new paragraph for each new point.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Capitalize I, use a full stop after each sentence, and tidy up the phrases.
tone
Keep a calm and polite tone. Show your loyalty but stay firm.
tone
Polite tone in parts, shows loyalty history.
structure
Has a closing and sign-off.
content
Gives facts (years, no claim) to back up point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insurance
  • increase
  • pay
  • car
  • customer
  • loyal
  • premium
  • claims
  • driving record
  • economic
  • afford
  • reconsider
  • rates
  • payment
  • letter
  • dissatisfaction
  • justify
  • situation
  • request
  • years
  • harder
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