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Some people say that Art ( eg Painting, Music, Poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Art
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not only painting, drawing. Both of us have
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 ability to create
art
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.
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Art
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 is able that
everyone
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 can
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their
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to their
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 idea on it. In the
educatonal
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educational
 system, the majority of
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school
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schools
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 will promote the
art
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lesson
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,
such
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 as the
vistual
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visual
art
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, music
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lesson
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. The
vistual
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visual
art
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lesson
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is promote
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promotes
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 the
oppunities
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opportunities
 for the pupils to have a chance to explore their "
art
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 cells". The
art
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lesson
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not only
provide
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 the drawing skill that the pupils to learn and explore themselves, but
also
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provide
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 some clay, ceramics
to
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 the
puplis
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pupils
try
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to try
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 to build up their
creativities
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creativity
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. In Hong Kong, the M+ museum is promoting the idea
of
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that
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everyone
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 can contribute their ideas
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Art
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 and
promting
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promoting
 the
art
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 society. Nowadays , the internet is developing quickly. People can upload their ideas on music
in
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the
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social media. On
the
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Instagram,
it's
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it
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provide
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provides
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 the opening space
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the
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creaters
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creators
 to publish
thier
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their
 own views about the
art
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 on
this
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 social media. Some creative singers are
easily
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 to find
in
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the
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Instagram. In
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South
Koren
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Korea
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, some entertainment companies hold some draft
show
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shows
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, which are
opening
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 for
everyone
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 can join.
Thus
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, it can be seen that
everyone
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 can contribute their own views on the
art
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therefore
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,
Art
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 can be made by
everyone
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. The coin has two sides, it is
easily
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 to find the
art
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 in the museums.
However
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, the exhibits in the museums were
creating
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created
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 by some well-known artists. The artist created their own style
on
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in
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 the
art
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. And
their
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they're
they are
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 unprecedented. Nowadays,
the
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people would like to learn or copy from the
artists
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artist's
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 style, more than creating their own style.

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planning
Plan the essay well. Start with a clear view on the problem. Then add two body parts that each show one side, and finish with a short ending that state your view again.
development
Give one or two small examples for each point. Tie each idea to the task.
language
Use simple, correct sentences and check spelling to show your point well.
idea
The writer tries to show both sides and uses some real life examples.
structure
There is an effort to explain that art can be for many, not only a few.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal expression
  • emotional expression
  • mastering techniques
  • innate talent
  • therapeutic benefits
  • healing and personal growth
  • democratization of art
  • cultural valuation
  • artistic perception
  • art education
  • latent talent
  • economic factors
  • craftsmanship
  • creative process
  • artistic merit
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