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nuclear power is far too dangerous; therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources such as hydroelectric power and solar energy. To what extent do you agree?

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Energy
 is produced by various methods from atomic
energy
as well as
 from natural
resources
. It is a debatable topic that nuclear
energy
 is harmful and should be prohibited and replaced by renewable
energy
resources
such
 as solar
power
.
According to
 my perspective, I completely agree with
this
 statement as atomic
power
 is harmful to mankind.
Firstly
, the natural
resources
 of
energy
 have their benefits as it is renewable sources and
also
 cost-efficient. I believe we can get enough
power
 from solar panels which depend on sunlight and there is no negative impact on humans
as well as
 on the environment.
Although
 the generation of electricity is free of cost, we only need a single investment of solar panels which can be installed on the roofs of our houses.
Therefore
, in good weather conditions, everyone can produce
power
 from sunlight.
Secondly
, wind
energy
,
as well as
 hydro
energy
, are
also
 helpful to manufacturing megawatts of electricity so we can install wind stations in open unused areas of our country. These methods are suitable as they neither produce harmful gases nor are destructive to life. On the other side, nuclear
energy
 is used by various nations in a controlled way to generate
power
 through fission or fusion reactions but it can be harmful if there is some problem in the plant.
Moreover
, it can be exploded or used as a weapon by other countries to destroy particular nations.
Therefore
, the uranium plants which are used by different countries should be limited and the Government invest money in natural
resources
 for the safety of humans.
To conclude
, it seems to me that nuclear
power
 should be replaced by another form of
energy
 as natural methods are reliable, cost-efficient and safe for life on the earth.
Therefore
, the Government should promote natural forms of
energy
.
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