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The environment problems facing today's world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the contemporary
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 issue of
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environment
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the environment
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 has sparked widespread public debate. Some people are convinced that common people
hardly can
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can hardly
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 do to boost the
environment
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, and they argue that the authority and large
corporation
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corporations
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 are accountable for
protect
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protecting
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environment
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the environment
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. In my view, I partly agree with
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 perspective. Admittedly, there is no doubt that the government and big businesses play a crucial role in protecting
natural
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the natural
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environment
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. In terms of the authority, they can enact the law and implement the policy to
enhace
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enhance
 environmental protections. In Norway, for
insatnce
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instance
, the local
goverment
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government
 improves air quality by imposing strict air quality
regualtions
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regulations
 to
redcue
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reduce
 pollutants
such
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 as carbon dioxide and particulate matter from industrial and transportation emissions. Another compelling reason is that companies can
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 contribute to protecting
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environment
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the environment
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, especially
some
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in some
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 chemical industries.
these
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 industries
always will
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will always
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 release
amount
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an amount
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 of industrial wastewater into
river
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the river
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, which results in contamination of
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water
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the water
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 .
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, the corporation can build more
water
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 management facilities and sewage treatment plants to improve
water
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 resources efficiency and recycling, reducing environmental deterioration.
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 the
governemnt
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government
 and large companies should bear more
responsibilites
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responsibilities
in
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to
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certain
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a certain
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 extent, individuals’ role cannot be fully ignored.
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 is mainly because the importance of individual responsibility for environmental protection can reduce pollution through daily fixed and conscious actions. To be more specific,
every
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all
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 local inhabitants
all
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apply
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can cut down
plastuc
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plastic
 waste by using reusable bags and
water
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 bottles, thereby reducing the degradation of
natural
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the natural
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environment
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. Meanwhile, individuals
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also can
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 save energy by reducing unnecessary electricity consumption and
more using
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using more
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 energy-friendly appliances,
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 lowering their carbon footprint. In conclusion, despite the fact that the
governemnt
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government
 and large companies are
suppose
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supposed
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 to shoulder more duties for environmental protection, individuals’ responsibility is
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 totally effective for protecting
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.

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task response
Be clear in your view at the start: say if you agree or not and how much.
structure
Plan your writing: one idea in each paragraph, a clear intro and a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, short sentences to make the meaning clear.
language
Check spelling and grammar to fix easy mistakes.
content
The writer shows a real view and uses an example (Norway).
coherence
Link words help ideas connect.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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