Some people believe that having a job you love is the key to a happy life. Others think it is more important to have a stable and well-paid job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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claim that
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satisfaction is more important than a well-paid
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others believe that without financial
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, you can not achieve happiness.
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essay will discuss both opinions by examining common arguments and their counterpoints before concluding my personal view. Opponents claim that a
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that you love is a key to a happy life, emotional support, etc. The other half of the majority think that
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idea ignores the fact that
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satisfaction does not pay the bills
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support your family. Without financial
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stability
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stability,
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you can not reach happiness.
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, many
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argue that financial
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jobs
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guarantee money and luxury
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even well-paid
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can be stressful. Many
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claim that individuals with well-paid
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under stress and hard circumstances. With
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that,
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they can feel
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a lack
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of purpose and even anxiety.
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their quality of life can suffer regardless of their financial success. Another common argument is that you can find
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with both intentions. Many
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argue that you can find a
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you love with financial
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may be true for some
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yet
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it is not
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accurate. Even a
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that makes you satisfied can be stressful
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nevertheless
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with proper education and research, you can find a
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with your
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and intentions at the same time. Taking everything into account, both financial
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and
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satisfaction
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are
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important for a happy life. From my point of view, I strongly believe that without a well-paid
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job
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job,
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you can not support your family.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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