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The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005.

The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005.
The bar chart illustrates the average number of
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 spent on housework by four distinct categories of
women
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(unemployed, part-time employed and full-time), compared to men doing full-time work in the UK from 1985 and 2005.
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 ,in all 3 years, it is quite evident that most affairs are done by
women
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 , especially the unemployed and
women
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 with part-time employment.
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 the trend of doing house chores increased among males
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 and ladies with occupations, it remained stable for unemployed
women
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 between 1985 and 2005. Starting with unemployed ladies ,first and foremost, it accounted for 7
hours
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 in the year 1985,
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 went down to 6.5 in 1995, shifted back to 7 again in 2005.
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,
women
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 with partial occupation spent approximately 5
hours
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 doing housework from 1985 to 1995 , but gradually climbed to 2.5
hours
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 in 2005.
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 ,
women
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 with full-time occupation contributed nearly 3
hours
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 in 2005 , which rose from the previous 2
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 in the
last
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 two decades.
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 , for men, they spent about 1 hour doing housework consistently in the decades from 1985 to 1995, but lately in 2005, it slightly went up to 1.5
hours
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. In conclusion , as evident from the data , men spend less time on home affairs ,
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 females who have no job spend the most
hours
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 doing daily work between 1985 to 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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