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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting.

In many countries, many
people
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 like to
rent
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 an
apartments
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apartment
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instead
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 of buying
one
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. Some
people
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 think
this
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 is wrong because of the benefits gained by owning a
house
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.
While
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 others think it is right because of the cost and expenses used to acquire a building.
This
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 essay looks at both the negative and positive
aspect
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aspects
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 of renting an apartment. On
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one
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the one
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 hand , there are various benefits of acquiring a
house
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.
One
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 of them is the freedom to move at
anytime
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any time
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 you need. Renting a
house
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 allows the tenants
move
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to move
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 as soon as the contract expires without any consequences.
For example
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, a
tenant
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 might decide
relocate
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to relocate
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 from London to Lincoln
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 a job opportunity. It is easy for the
tenant
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move
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to move
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 because he
just
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is just
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 renting the
house
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unlike
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, unlike
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 a person who just purchased a
house
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 with a big loan or savings. It would be very difficult for the person to leave that city.
Furthermore
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, it is very
cost effective
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cost-effective
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 because the landlord pays for the major repairs of the
house
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and
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, and
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 the
tenant
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 will be able to save.
In addition
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, it enables
the
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apply
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people
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 to
leave
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live
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 in
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house
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a house
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, they can't afford.
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, renting a
house
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 has a positive impact on the lives of
people
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 in the world.
On the other hand
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, there are some risks that can be overlooked.
One
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 of them is the increase
of
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in
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rent
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 .
Due to
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 the constant repairs, economic situation or the desire for more money by the
landlord
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landlord,
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rent
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 can be increased.
This
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 will make
difficult
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it difficult
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 for tenants to budget and plan for the future. The second risk is that a building is an asset which generates money for its owners through
purchase
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the purchase
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 of
buyer
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a buyer
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. Unlike
renting
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renting,
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that
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which
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 does not generate any money for the tenants.
Lastly
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, the
tenant
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 must follow the rules and regulations of the landlord
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hence
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, hence
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 reducing the freedom of the person to make any changes to the
house
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.
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, these risks illustrate the negative effect of renting to an individual and the benefit of owning a
house
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. In conclusion, there are both negative and
postive
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positive
 aspects of renting. On
th postive
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the positive
 aspect, it is
cost effective
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cost-effective
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 and
ensures
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allows
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people
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 to live where they
want
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want,
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while
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 on the negative side, the
rent
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 can be easily increased without warning
which
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, which
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 will affect the budget of the individual. Both aspects need to be considered when renting or buying a
house
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 in the future,

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grammar
Check grammar in each sentence and fix verb form and preposition use.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
task
In the conclusion, state a clear view on renting vs buying.
content
Give more simple examples to back each point.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected.
grammar
Correct spelling and punctuation, and tidy up spaces.
content
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
cohesion
It uses some link words to connect ideas.
content
There are places with clear examples (job move).
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rent
  • buy
  • home
  • house
  • owner
  • landlord
  • tenant
  • lease
  • contract
  • deposit
  • monthly
  • money
  • cost
  • price
  • loan
  • repair
  • fix
  • maintenance
  • move
  • stay
  • freedom
  • budget
  • plan
  • future
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • plus
  • minus
  • security
  • risks
  • rules
  • change
  • place
  • own
  • ownership
  • money
  • income
  • stay longer
  • stay short
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