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The map show the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map show the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the centre of Paris and two suitable locations for a company that wants to open a new restaurant in the area.
Overall
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, one possible
location
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 is
located
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near the Eiffel Tower and
Art
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the Art
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 Gallery, and
this
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 place offers views of the
River
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Seine
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. The other
location
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 is located south-west
side
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 of the Maritime Museum, which offers a stunning view of the
River
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Seine
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 as well. Regarding the first
location
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 , the place is situated on the left bank of
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River
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the River
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Seine
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 with many popular places in Paris nearby.
Firstly
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 ,
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 will offer a view of the famous Eiffel Tower , and you can visit the Art gallery located on the east
side
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 of the restaurant.
Similarly
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 , you can watch the
river
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Seine
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 on the north
side
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 and the public park on the south
side
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.
On the other hand
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, the other
location
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 is located a little far from the city centre on the right bank of the
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river
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Seine River
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Seine
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. It does offer stunning views of the
river
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 , but you don't have a close look at the Eiffel Tower,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 you can walk to the nearby Maritime Museum. It offers a view of the park
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as
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, as
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 well as it's just located on the west
side
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 of the park.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words location, river, seine, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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