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Band 4

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. *why might this be the case *Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Undoubtedly, owning a property is seen as a sign of success and a key to happiness in many parts of the world
due to
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 various reasons like pride
of
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in
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the
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society and a chance to build
the
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wealth. In
this
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 essay, I will shed light on both positive and negative
aspect
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 of
this
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 situation.
To begin
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with
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 the positives of buying
a
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real estate
is
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are
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 that in today's
economical
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economic
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 condition
having
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, having
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 your own property gives you
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financial
security
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security,
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 as
not only it
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it not only
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 builds equity but
also
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 provides you with
the
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 permanent
place
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 to stay.
Moreover
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, one can choose the interior of the own
place
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 and give it a special look
but
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, but
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that is
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 not possible in renting.
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, in most foreign
countries
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countries,
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 individuals
are
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staying in
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rented basements are not allowed to choose the design and interior of the
place
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which
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, which
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 I think is quite boring to stay.
On the other hand
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, renting a home is suitable for
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middle class
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 people as the cost of living is really high
and
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, and
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 sometimes it is hard to buy
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land . People
highly
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can afford the rents
to
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in
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 the area they are residing in.
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, renting makes the people
finacially
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financially
 secure as they do not have to go for
high paying interest
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 money to buy the property.
This
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 gives them the financial freedom as they are free of debt.
To sum up
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,
although
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the
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renting seems
bit
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a bit
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 easier in terms of financial security but owning gives
the
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lifetime access to the
place
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 to stay. It is
more
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a more
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 sustainable form to secure wealth in today's era.

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improvement
The essay should end with a clear view. State if you think owning is good or bad and say why.
structure
Start each paragraph with a topic line that tells the point you will make.
linking
Use simple links like and, but, also, because to join ideas.
structure
Make the conclusion short and clear.
content
There is a use of both sides in the essay.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with start, middle, end.
content
The idea of owning vs renting is easy to see.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • own
  • owning
  • rent
  • renting
  • home
  • house
  • buy
  • buying
  • money
  • save
  • saving
  • loan
  • debt
  • price
  • cost
  • move
  • mobility
  • security
  • stability
  • family
  • children
  • pride
  • status
  • invest
  • investment
  • market
  • afford
  • affordable
  • maintenance
  • repair
  • care
  • job
  • future
  • culture
  • tradition
  • society
  • view
  • positive
  • negative
  • balance
  • plan
  • choice
  • option
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