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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrate how a university’s
sports
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 centre looks at present and how it is planned to change after redevelopment.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
sports
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 centre is expected to be completely transformed from a simple layout with outdoor facilities into a larger, fully indoor complex offering a wider variety of
sports
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 and leisure options. Currently, the main area includes a 25-metre pool surrounded by seating, with a changing room to the west and a gym to the east. The reception is situated at the southern entrance,
while
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 outdoor courts are located on both sides of the main building. In the future, the outdoor courts will be replaced by new indoor facilities. On the west, there will be a leisure pool, a
sports
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 shop, and another changing room. The eastern side will feature an extended gym, a
sports
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 hall, and two dance studios.
Additionally
Linking Words
, a café and
extra
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an extra
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 changing room will be added near the reception area.

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task response
Your plan is good. Add a short closing line to sum up the change.
coherence
Use more link words to show order, like first, next, and then.
coherence
Tell both old and new parts in clear order so readers can compare.
language
Keep grammar simple and use steady verb tense.
structure
Clear start that states the main idea
coherence
Good use of time words like 'Currently' and 'In the future'
content
Gives both old and new parts with exact places and features
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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