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The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four counties.
The table illustrates rail
transport
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 usage across four countries—Malaysia,
Canada
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,
China
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, and the UAE—by comparing the number of passengers, the average distance travelled per person, and the volume of
cargo
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 carried in billions of tons.
Overall
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, clear trends can be observed.
China
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 stands out as the country that relies most heavily on rail
transport
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,
while
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Canada
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records
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 the lowest figures. Another notable pattern is that
cargo
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transport
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 volumes are relatively similar among the countries compared to passenger data. In Malaysia and the UAE, around 5.5 to 6 million people use rail
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,
whereas
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China
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records
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 a significantly higher figure of about 27 million passengers.
Canada
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 has the lowest usage, with only 0.3 million users. The average distance travelled per person follows a similar pattern
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Canada
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records
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 about 80 kilometres per head, Malaysia and the UAE about 780 kilometres, and
China
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 leads with roughly 1,980 kilometres.
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,
cargo
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transport
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 figures are much closer. The UAE carries the least
cargo
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, followed closely by Malaysia. Surprisingly,
Canada
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records
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 the highest
cargo
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 volume at 28.2 billion tons, exceeding
China
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’s 23.01 billion tons.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, canada, china, cargo, records with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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