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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think
schools
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 and universities teach too many facts and not enough practical
skills
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. I agree with
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 idea. In my opinion,
students
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 need more real-life
skills
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 to prepare for their future. First of all,
schools
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 spend a lot of time on theory and memorising information.
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,
students
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 learn history dates, science facts, and grammar rules for many years.
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 knowledge is important, but sometimes
students
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 only remember it for exams and forget
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. It is not always useful in our daily
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. Many subjects focus on textbooks and tests, not real experience.
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, practical
skills
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 are very important for
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.
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students
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 should learn how to communicate with others, work in a team, or solve problems in real situations. In many
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, these
skills
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 are not taught enough. When
students
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 finish school, they often do not know how to handle basic things like making a CV, managing money, or cooking simple meals. These
skills
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 are very useful for adult life. In my view, education should include both facts and practical
skills
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. Teachers can give
students
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 more projects, group work, or activities outside the classroom.
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 will help them to use their knowledge in real life. In conclusion, I believe
schools
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 and universities spend too much time on theory. Practical
skills
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 are
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 very important and should be a part of the education system.

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Make your view more clear in the first line and repeat it in the end. Use a short plan at the start of the essay.
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Each part should have one main idea. Start with a strong topic sentence. Use simple 'first', 'second', 'finally' to show order.
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Use more real life examples and explain how these skills help in work or daily life. Keep examples short and clear.
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Link ideas with small words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'for example'. This helps flow.
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Clear view that facts are too many and life skills are needed.
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Use of common and clear words makes your idea easy to follow.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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