Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals hold the opinion that the main ecological issue of our time is the
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biodiversity
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others claim that there are more problems
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as climate change. I am of the firm conviction that both issues are to be in charge of.
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, we live in a world where ongoing
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construction
of factories and houses that lead to
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,
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are variety of species have been considered as endangered.
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, biodiversity is vital for keeping
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balanced, since it supports food production and,
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, handles the
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of climate change.
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, in order to increase the survival chance for the animals, the government should bring up
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,
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as creating wildlife
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corridors
that would help the species migrate from place to place.
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, concerns about global warming
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should be taken into account, since the rise in global temperature has led to more
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frequent
and intense natural disasters
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as wildfires, floods and heatwaves.
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, switching from fossil
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to renewable energy sources like solar and wind can significantly reduce greenhouse gas emissions. In
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case, international cooperation is essential to tackle global warming effectively.
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, both views
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by different
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of individuals are vital, since both are
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contributing significantly
to environmental problems
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I support every opinion since the internal and international
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are
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key in order to preserve
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planet.

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grammar
Fix many sentence errors so the ideas are clear.
coherence
Make a clear start for each paragraph and show how it links to the task.
task response
Give more real examples for each side to show you know the topic.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a clear end line that restates the view.
content
Some good links to climate issue and nature are used.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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