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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Simmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Simmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the percentage of households in one country that owned electrical appliances (washing machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner) from 1920 to 2019, and the number of
hours
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 of
housework
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 per week during the same period. In general, it is evident that the ownership of all three electrical appliances increased considerably over the century. Another trend which can be observed is that the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per week declined sharply. At the start of the period, vacuum cleaners were the most common appliance, used by 30% of households in 1920.
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, refrigerators were owned by only about 2%,
while
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 washing machines were used by around 40%.
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, refrigerator ownership rose dramatically from almost zero in 1920 to 100% by 1980 and remained stable afterwards.
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, vacuum cleaners showed a steady increase from 30% in 1920 to around 100% in 2000.
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, washing machines experienced slower growth, rising from 40% in 1920 to about 75% in 2019, with a slight decline around 1980. Meanwhile, the number of
hours
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 of
housework
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 per week saw a dramatic decline, dropping from 50
hours
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 in 1920 to only about 15
hours
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 in 2019. It is
also
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 worth noting that as household appliance ownership rose, the time spent on
housework
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 consistently decreased

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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