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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

The authors acknowledge that their work focuses solely on the isolated kinase domain rather than the full-length receptor, which may fail to consider subtle functional layers arising from juxtamembrane and transmembrane regions, as noted by McLaughlin et al. (2005) and Moriki et al. (2001). They observe that
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 offers a static view of an inherently flexible system. As the authors note, “the two regions are not present in the crystal structures,” leaving open the possibility that the kinase domains might interact in a more fluid manner to activate one another.

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planning
Plan your view clearly. Say what side you take and finish with a simple round on the view.
content
Show both sides in full. Add your own eye on the topic and keep to the task.
examples
Give one or two small examples to back a point. Simple facts or ideas from life work well.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words. Use sign words like also, but, and then to move ideas.
structure
The text uses phrases like 'as noted' and 'left open the possibility' to tie ideas.
content
There is a clear focus on the limits of the work and the topic is shown.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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