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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory, job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Individuals differ
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 on whether one should accept an unpleasant situation or try to change it.
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 accepting reality could help
people
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 remain calm and avoid
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frustration
, I believe that
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 effort to enhance life usually brings greater benefits. Some
people
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 think it is better to accept a bad situation because doing so can protect their emotional
wellbeing
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.
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people
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 who face long-term unemployment or low salaries may have little control over external factors
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 as the economy or family
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. Constantly fighting against these limits may only create stress and disappointment. Accepting the situation allows them to do what they can manage,
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 as maintaining relationships or mental health.
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, in some cultures, contentment and patience are seen as
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 of wisdom rather than weakness. From
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 perspective, acceptance becomes a practical strategy for reducing anxiety and living peacefully. Others argued that improvement is the only path to progress.
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 who set goals and work toward change usually gain confidence and new opportunities.
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, many workers take online courses to move into better-paid careers
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 of staying in unsatisfactory jobs.
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 mindset not only improves personal circumstances but
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 stimulates innovation within society. If everyone simply accepted their limitations, economic and social development would slow dramatically.
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, striving for improvement often leads to both personal growth and wider progress. In conclusion,
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 acceptance can bring short-term peace, continuous self-improvement provides more lasting satisfaction. A balanced approach combining patience and determination is most effective.

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planning
Plan before you write. keep a simple plan with two main ideas.
structure
Make each part talk about one idea and add a small example.
language
Use plain words and check small spelling mistakes.
content
Clear view kept throughout.
content
Good use of examples to show a point.
structure
Ends with a balance of both sides.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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