Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Considering the adverse impacts
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junk
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to
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ourselves and our community, some suggest
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charging
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taxes
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on consuming
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food
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or for being fat. Some,
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, doubt the fairness and necessity of
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taxes
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.
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essay discusses how they encourage
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to consume healthier alternatives of
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,
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then
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explains how unfairness is caused
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intrinsic
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the intrinsic
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impacts of
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weight
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.
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,
taxes
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on unhealthy
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consumption and
overweight
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motivate
people
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to eat healthier
food
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. Since eating
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healthy meals
charge
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higher prices,
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would consider enjoying their substitutes, meaning healthier
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, which
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not charge any extra
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.
This
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also
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encourages citizens to avoid being overweight by managing and healthy diets, which improve the
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public health of the society.
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, several countries under the European Union have implemented a ‘fat tax’, and it was found that the government spending for subsidising medical
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dropped, thereby
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the high effectiveness of
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tests
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in improving the health condition of citizens.
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, some concern about these charges because intrinsic
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play
a
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integral role in impacting
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weight
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. The
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of a human being is not solely affected by external
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such
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as eating habits.
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, it can be affected by family members,
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that the weights of parents positively correlate with
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of their children. I have a friend who goes to the gym regularly and
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a healthy diet, with a good amount of intake of fruits and vegetables daily, but he is inevitably chubby because his dad
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overweights
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. Regardless of
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extrinsic
human efforts paid in managing
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weights, some simply fail to control
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unchangeable
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,
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hence
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it is worth considering whether these
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are always fair for everybody. In conclusion,
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these
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foster
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encourage
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citizens to consume healthier
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as substitutes
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the unhealthy ones, a considerable
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of
people
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are against that since
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weight
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is affected by intrinsic
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. Considering both sides of
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arguments
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, I personally think a tax on unhealthy
food
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is necessary since the choice of
food
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is fully determined by human beings.
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, considering a ‘fat tax’ is unfair to certain
people
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in our society, where equity is cherished,
tests
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on
body
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weight
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should not be imposed.

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grammar
Use simple sentences to fix grammar and make ideas clearer.
coherence
In paragraphs, state one main idea and link ideas with clear connectors like 'but', 'however', 'also', and 'therefore'.
structure
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and restate it in the conclusion.
content
Give full support for each point. Explain why the point matters for the view.
examples
Choose one strong example and explain it, not just name places or facts.
content
The essay shows both sides and gives a personal view.
content
It uses examples to illustrate points.
structure
A clear conclusion with your own view is present.

Your opinion

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