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The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.
The bar chart presents the proportion of high school
students
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 who passed competency exams across seven subjects in 2010/11, broken down by gender.
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,
girls
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 outnumbered
boys
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 in almost all subjects except for geography. The largest difference was seen in both chemistry and computer science. About 36.7% of female
students
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 were successful in physics, compared with 34.6% of male
students
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. The percentage of females who achieved a pass in chemistry accounted for 30.2%,
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 that of males was nearly half
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 figure at 14.1%. In history, both
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 and
boys
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 exceeded 20%, at 25.6% and 22.9%, respectively.
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, 30.4% of
boys
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 qualified in geography, higher than the 20.1% recorded in
girls
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. The share of
students
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 in foreign languages had a small gap, with
girls
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 at 47.4% and
boys
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 at 46.8%.
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, the figure for
girls
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 who succeeded in mathematics stood at 49.2%, in comparison with 48.4% for
boys
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.
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, females made up 56.3% of successful candidates in computer science,
whereas
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 male candidates were considerably lower at just 42.1%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, girls, boys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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