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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent
The chart illustrates the number of
visitors
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in
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to
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 a Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017. In three different types
which
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, which
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,
visitors
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who's
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who
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 stayed in cruise ships or
visitors
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who's
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who
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 stayed on the
island
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,
then
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 the total amount of tourists. Overview, people used to stay
in
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on
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 the
island
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quite
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more
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 often than
ships
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on ships
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, but that
recently has
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has recently
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 changed, people tend to book
curises intstead
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cruises instead
 of
been
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staying
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in
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on
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 the
island
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.
While
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 the
overall
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 number of tourists had
significant
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a significant
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 increase throughout the
years
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.
Firstly
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,
visitors
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 who stayed on the
island
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, in
2010
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2010,
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 the number
were
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was
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 less than a
million
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,
then
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 it increased a long the
years
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 and reached its peak in 2013 by
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million
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a million
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 and
half
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a half
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 and stayed stable in the next few
years
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, before it
fall
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fell
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 in
2016
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2016,
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then
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 it
come
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came
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 back to
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million
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a million
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 and
half
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a half
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 exactly in 2017.
On the other hand
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, people who stayed in cruises
,
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apply
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it
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apply
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start
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started
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by
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at
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 250,000, after that it
fluactued
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fluctuated
 in the next period, until 2014 when it
start
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started
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 to
rose
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rise
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 dramatically to
reached
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reach
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 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2017.
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Finally
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Finally,
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 the total amount of tourists
,
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apply
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it
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apply
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was 1
million
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 in 2010,
then
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 it had significant growth, of
visitors
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 throughout the
years
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, and it had in 2017, 3
million
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 and half
visitors
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respectivily
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respectively
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the number of tourists
  • visitors
  • island
  • year
  • years
  • from
  • to
  • over
  • during
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • climb
  • peak
  • highest
  • fall
  • decrease
  • dip
  • fluctuate
  • change
  • trend
  • overall
  • compare
  • in comparison with
  • in thousands
  • early
  • middle
  • late
  • reach
  • reach a peak
  • the beginning
  • the end
  • higher
  • lower
  • stable
  • steady
  • notable
  • period
  • towards
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