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Writing Samples
Band 4

Government around the world should be responsible for providing a free education to all of its citizens. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that governments should spend extreme efforts to
improving
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 the education systems, especially in public schools.
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 it is a commonly held belief that authorities should
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provide
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 service
as
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a
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free, there is an argument
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that opposes
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 it. In my opinion, I consider that
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dependence
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 on many factors
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 the economic circumstances and the proportion of
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the population
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.
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 with, regimes should provide all supporting methods in
education
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the education
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 process.
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, they have
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 role among learning programs like the quality of
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, construction of teaching facilities
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 the main important thing is
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 of
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 service, since they are in a position to do so.
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,
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the union
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 should allocate an immense budget to encourage the needy scholars to
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 their studies.
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, the KSA vision among young adults
,
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it
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provides them with
a
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Complimentary
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 scholarships,
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free
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 books and advanced education tools. Another point to consider is that
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 chance has
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 to deserving ones. It
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 possible to say that the wealthy households should afford their children's fees.
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, nowadays modern technologies
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 a vital role in decreasing
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of
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the
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expensive things like
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operation disburses by relying on
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online way.
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, some research conducted in developed countries suggests that online
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 play a pivotal role in reducing the requirements and enhancing the nation's resources. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that we should give
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 to the superior and
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poor students.

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content
Be clear on your view. Say if you agree or not in the first line.
structure
Make a simple plan: intro, part, part, end.
structure
One idea per part. Use and but to join ideas.
language
Use easy words. Say free education and government to show your point.
grammar
Fix main grammar. Use simple form: should be able to provide and pursue.
content
Give one or two real examples. This helps.
structure
There is a plan with a start, body and end.
content
Some simple ideas on money and help for students.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government
  • free
  • education
  • citizens
  • agree
  • disagree
  • access
  • equal
  • opportunity
  • future
  • money
  • budget
  • tax
  • cost
  • benefit
  • education
  • school
  • college
  • university
  • student
  • teacher
  • quality
  • standard
  • system
  • public
  • work
  • job
  • skill
  • economy
  • growth
  • plan
  • policy
  • result
  • fairness
  • support
  • loan
  • grant
  • subsidy
  • family
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