The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

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illustrates

the various leisure activities in which the older citizens of America spent their time from 1980 to 2010.

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, watching television was the highly preferred activity, after which hiking gained more popularity and peaked in 30 years than TV. Slowly visiting theatres had a downfall

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is the least

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activity. First of all, reading books started to rise from 30% and reached 40% in ten

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years

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, decreased to 20% in

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10 years and

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shot

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to 60%in 2010.

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with the contrast

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, visiting cinema theatres dropped

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from half to 30% in

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decade and steadily increased to 40% in the year 2000. Yet, continued to go upwards and reached about 45% in the end. Only hiking showed a constant upward trend from 20% till80% in

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period of time.

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with the lowest percentage of roughly 5% of people surfed the internet, which slightly

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rose

to approximately 15% in the year

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and suddenly rocketed to 50

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in2010

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in 2010

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, watching TV had the

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highest

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among

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

204 words

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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

It is common nowadays for each member of the family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think it will lead to a break down in family relationships and communication. What is your opinion?

Young adults are now choosing to wait until later in life, often until they are in their 30s, to settle down and get married. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished and what measure can be taken to tackle this problem?

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