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nowadays artifical intelligence is being used to drive cars why is the happening ? is it a positive or negative development ( write an introduction)

In recent years, A.I.
is
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has been
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 increasingly
being
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utilized
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utilised
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 to drive vehicles.
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 is
occuring
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occurring
due to
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 the advancements in
technonogy
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technology
 and it should be seen as a positive development because it reduces traffic
accedents
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accidents
. Scientists and engineers have pushed the
bounderies
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boundaries
 in science and engineering and
start
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 to use
A.I.
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AI
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 in
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cars
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car
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 driving. These technological advancements have improved over the years which
make
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making
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 them
more
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apply
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easier to
utilize
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them
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apply
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in
such
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 an industry.
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, Google has
impelemented
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implemented
 a vast
numbers
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 of
self driven
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self-driving
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 vehicles to the market in the
last
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 decade.These
automitions
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automations
 have
programmed
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been programmed
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 with the
dada
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data
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 that
make
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makes
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 them
to
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drive
instead
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 of people in
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an effeiciant
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effeiciant
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efficient
 way. The
develoment
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development
in
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automation
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automated
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 vehicles should be viewed positively because it can protect human
being
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beings
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 lives.
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becaus
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because
that
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apply
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those
cars
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 can predict the
potintial
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potential
 danger through their sensors and they can avoid it.
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,
Teslas
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Tesla's
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cars
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have
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are
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 programmed to manage varied situations to avoid
potintial accedents
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potential accidents
and
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, and
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 they have been tested to check their
abilites
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abilities
 to
vigure
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mitigate
 the danger
and
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, and
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 98% of them
succeed
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pass
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 the test.
This
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 showed that these
self driving
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self-driving
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cars
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 are more effective than
human
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humans
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. In
conclousion
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conclusion
, the developments in technological advancement and using
artifical
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artificial
 intelligence in
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cars
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car
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 driving should be welcomed as it could save
people
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people's
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 lives by
minimizing
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minimising
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 human errors and avoiding accidents.

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task response
Your main idea is not clear at times. State your view in one line at the start and keep it.
coherence
Use a plan in the essay. Put one idea in each paragraph and connect with small links like 'also','but','yet'.
grammar
Fix many spelling and word errors. Use short, easy words. Check common spellings.
accuracy
Use facts that can be checked or avoid numbers you cannot back up. If you say '98%', tell where it comes from.
examples
Give a strong example for how AI in cars helps people, and explain it next to the fact.
structure
End with a short idea that restates your view.
content
The essay shows a view that AI in cars can be good.
examples
You use some real examples like Google and Tesla.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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