some thinkthat private companies and individuals should pay for cleaning up pollution ,while other say its government's responsibility .discuss and state your opinion.

Pollution has been a problem that couldn't be tackled successfully for decades.It has always been a subject of argument
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whether it is the responsibility of private
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and individuals or the
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to clean it.I believe
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serious issue requires a team effort from the
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as well as
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private individuals altogether. The
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have vast financial power and resources ,which can be invested to tackle
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challenge. The authorities have a wider scope to reach at root cause of
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pressing issue.
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,the ruling body is more authoritative and effective in implementing changes and rules that can address the problem.
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,in New Delhi,
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bodies were able to bring down air pollution significantly by introducing new rules for driving, which states that
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on one day
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, cars
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with odd number plates can drive
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on the alternative
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cars with even number plates can drive.
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led to a reduction in the number of vehicles on roads ,which improved the air quality.
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looking at
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problem from the ground level ,a lot can be done by citizens and private startups. People in society know the causes of pollution precisely at ground zero,so it's easy for them to provide a solution.
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,in various private societies , clubs or organisations are created by people of society to reduce the garbage production and
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small recycling projects are being run to reduce the carbon footprint. Small businesses and
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can
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play a vital role in setting up their own treatment plants, so that they become emission-free
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and become environmental heroes. In conclusion ,I would say that
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giant complication of harmful emissions can only be solved by a team approach, in which the
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,
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and the public
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all have to play on their feet.It is
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the responsibility
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of the
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to create ideal living conditions for its people , and
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responsibility
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the responsibility
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of everyone in society to be a good Samaritan.

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grammar
Fix long sentences. Use full stops to end ideas.
cohesion
Use simple links to connect ideas, like and, but, also, so.
structure
Make plan clear: first discuss both sides, then give your view.
examples
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grammar
Check spelling and punctuation to improve sense.
content
You show your view clearly.
content
You give a real example from life.
organization
The parts are put in order with a clear start and end.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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