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living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social problem and practical problem. to what extern do you agree or disagree with this statement.

There is no denying that living in a foreign
country
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 can be challenging.
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 some people think that living in a
country
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 where you have to speak a foreign
language
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 can cause social and practical problems, there is an opposing argument. I believe that immigrants may face
trumatic
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traumatic
 shocks at
first,
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but all of that will
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 as they become fluent in that
language
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.
To begin
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 with, there are many issues that people may struggle with when they arrive
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 a new
country
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. Social problems
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are
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 a major one
and
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, and
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 immigrants might
suffer
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struggle
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 to even
dealing
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deal
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 with the small things we take for granted.
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, they may find it difficult to communicate when they go to the grocery store, hospital, or
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 small talks with their neighbours. It is undeniable that
this
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 can create huge communication
brriers
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barriers
,
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however
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, trying to learn the
country
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's host
language
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 can solve the issue.
Additionally
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, living in another
country
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 creates emotional isolation, as travellers would be separated from their families and lack direct support. It is worth noting that over time, these bitter feelings will
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.
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, once the newcomers start to practice the new
language
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, whether at school or at work, things will
become better
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improve
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. They will be able to communicate with the natives and have small talks with everyone, which will help them create
storng
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strong
 relationships and know more and more about the customs and traditions.
This
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 will make immigrants feel more comfortable and stable, and slowly they might
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begin
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 to adapt to their environment. It is possible to say that
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 valuable experience teaches them what schools can never teach. In
conclusio
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conclusion
,
although
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 being in a new
country
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 and learn their
language
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 can pose several challenges at
first,
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gradually
this
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 will become easier to face. I think when migrants gain
language
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knowldege
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knowledge
, they will be more confident and satisfied.

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structure
Make your view clear in the start. State if you agree or not in a simple, strong sentence.
content
Use 2 main ideas only. In each body part, give one idea and a small proof or example.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Short and plain sentences are easier to read.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next, but don't overuse them.
conclusion
Finish with a short restatement of your view.
stance
Your view on the topic is clear.
content
You give a real example to show a problem.
structure
Your ideas go in a simple order that is easy to follow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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