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Nowadays air travel is cheaper than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development? Discuss and give your own opinion.

nowadays
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, you don'
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 need to spend too much money on flight tickets, which was a relevant issue back in the day. It is obvious that aeroplane companies are trying new approaches to attract new possible customers,
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 of the low flight rates
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 what I've experienced, positivity is the only way to describe
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 magnificent change.
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 essay will consider the observations of a possible consumer, after that it will check the revenue expected from
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 change of price, before
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 examining the disadvantages on the crew, the safety,
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 work ethics. When someone wants a cheap fly he would always refer to cheap airlines, which i don'
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 support at all, all though he can go every weekend without checking his bank account everytime, it will reflect on his saftey, for various reasons, which i will discuss in the lattar paragraph, but
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,
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 type of markting will make the airline more popular because every individual would advise these type of cheap airlines to his colleagues for the same various reasons,
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 the company could expand thier business to outside the court of an airport. But
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, the crew and leadrship will not contribute together, affecting the saftey of the original airbus,
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 the lack of monthly payment compared to other househoulders, as
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 would effect other parts of the industry, like maintainence, as it would leed to harm and deaths,
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 engineers and workers not feeling credited for their work, either by money or other special bonuses. In conclusion,I don'
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 like
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 idea, because decreasing the salaries would directly affect safety,as it is the most important thing;
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, we can'
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 say
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 is not a smart move. In the long term ,
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 will attract more people and nations worldwide to travel with them.

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planning
Plan what you want to say. Use three main ideas and give your view at the end.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear line that shows the point.
linking
Use simple linking words to join ideas. For example, also, but, so, because.
language
Check word form and spelling. Use short, easy words.
examples
Give one small example for each idea to show it well.
task
End with a clear view. State if you say yes or no.
content
The writer keeps the idea that cheap flights can bring more people.
scope
There is an attempt to discuss both sides and the final view.
content
The issue of safety is felt as a real part of the talk.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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