It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. (AI Response)

These days, there are several factors which can help
people
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to
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improve their private and
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lives. It is said that taking
risks
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is one of the essential ones. What I believe is that
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the benefits
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of taking
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are more than the drawbacks, and I am going to elaborate on
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in the following. There have been various reasons to take
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.
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situation provides opportunities for
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to become familiar with vulnerable and different perspectives
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, which
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help them to enter a new world.
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, they
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exited from their comfort zone and they can test new experiences.
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, they will become more confident because they know they are responsible for the consequences of their decisions.
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, they make
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their
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to become successful. Another factor which shouldn’t be underestimated is that taking
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helps
people
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to think better because they have a lot of information
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tom
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their past.
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, when a dentist chooses to set up a clinic
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of
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a dental
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office. She tries so hard
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to consider
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all expenses
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, and the negative point.
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, she
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her goals more conveniently.
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, when
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tend to have
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house
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of
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a smaller
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one, they must think about their budget to avoid borrowing money, and
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problem
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problems
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for other
people
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, they rely on their ability to provide the best situation for themselves. In conclusion,
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,
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sometimes
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might be
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about
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the results
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of their decisions, they often
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create
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a
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situation for themselves to show their ability to others.

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strategy
Start with a clear view in one line and keep to this view in the rest of the essay.
structure
Make one main idea in each paragraph and add a small, easy example.
language
Use easy grammar and fix common errors like tense and plural forms.
coherence
Use link words to move ideas, such as first, then, and also, but, finally.
examples
Choose real and simple examples from life that show your point.
content
You show a clear view that risks can be good.
structure
The idea is easy to follow in parts and the plan is there.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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