In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Somepeople say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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been increasing significantly in most areas of the globe.
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development can be
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with imposing some cost to governments in terms of the old population
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care, but I assume its benefits
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as their efficient role
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having a wiser
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society
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governing a society which has
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population
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funds to protect them against
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variety of
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related to
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as brain
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, and their decreasing capability in mobility.
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Statistics Yearbook 2023, total medical &
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expenditures were ~9.05 trillion yuan in 2023. Population ageing is cited as a major factor in that increase. But
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accompany in our modern and fast-paced lifestyle has its own
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benefits for societies. They carry some invaluable
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characteristics
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as life-experienced, wise, rational thinker, and family supporter, which are vital for
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guests
to gain a balanced worldview and life aspect in our modern and fast-paced era.

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task response
Be clear in your view. Say if the good side or the bad side is bigger, and end with your own choice.
coherence
Give one idea per paragraph. Use short links to join ideas and make the flow easier.
lexical
Use simple words and check spelling to make your point clear.
strength
It shows some attempt to discuss both sides.
evidence
It uses a real number to show cost as an example.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life expectancy
  • Demographic shift
  • Healthcare infrastructure
  • Pension funds
  • Intergenerational solidarity
  • Consumer demographics
  • Workforce participation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Urban planning
  • Assisted living facilities
  • Socio-economic challenges
  • Sustainable development
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