This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country
IELTS Writing Task Chart for This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country
The graph illustrates the percentage of selected materials (Paper & cardboard,
Glass
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containers
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, Aluminium
cans
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and
plastics
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) that were recycled between 1982 and 2010.
Overall
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, Paper and cardboard were the most recycled material in the given period.
Glass
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containers
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was
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were
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the second most popular material.
Aluminum
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Aluminium
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cans
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were introduced in
1986
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1986,
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followed by
Plastics
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in 1990
,
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.
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However
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,
Aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
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had increased in amount to more than 40%
while
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Plastics
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had only increased by around 10%
at the end
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of the period measured. Paper and cardboard
was
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were
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the most popular
material
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materials
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which was recycled. It started at around 65% in 1982, peaked in 1994
to
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at
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its highest peak
80
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of 80
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%, and started declination until it reached 70% in 2010.
Glass
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containers
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were the second trendiest material to be recycled
,
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.
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Linking Words
However
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However,
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since its lowest point in
1990
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1990,
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it was a gradual revival and slowly climbed to as high as 60%
at the end
Linking Words
of the period.
Aluminum
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Aluminium
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cans
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were slowly introduced to recycling from
1986
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1986,
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then
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slowly increased
its
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their
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popularity until
it
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they
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had
been
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become
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almost as popular as
Glass
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containers
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in 2010.
Plastics
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were almost not recycled, since they started in 1990 at almost zero and kept a
low
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low,
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steady line until
2010
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2010,
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to just below 10.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, containers, cans, plastics with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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