IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Recent research has confirmed that “human activity has become the greatest threat to plant and animal life". Why do you think this has happened? How can we reduce our impact on the natural world?

Recent studies on
effects
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the effects
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 of human activity
to
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the
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nature
has
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have
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indicate
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indicated
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 that
humanity
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 is a major threat to plant and animal life. There are a lot of reasons to
proof
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this
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 research. I believe, solution should be
find
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found
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 out by ourselves as
humanity
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. Nature has been maintaining its rhythm
over
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for
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the
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thousands of years.
Unfortinately
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Unfortunately
, human activity became
a
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the
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 greatest threat
for
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to
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this
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 system and destroyed
step
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it step
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 by step.
Airpolution
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Air pollution
, toxic and
non-recycable
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non-recyclable
 waste and overpopulation are some examples
on
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of
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 the
consequenses
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consequences
 of human
activites
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activities
.
Therefore
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, the
hunderends
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hundreds
 of plant and animal species are in danger of extinction
and
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, and
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 it can be clearly said that
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this
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these
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 numbers will increase each day if some measures are not
be
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taken. When it comes to how
can we
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we can
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 reduce the negative impact on other lives as humans,
awaraness
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awareness
 on
this
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 issue is a significant step.
While
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 there are some people who have
awaraness
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awareness
, others have no idea about the crisis.
Thus
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, governments and activists should conduct campaigns to raise
awaraness
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awareness
.
Furthermore
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, usage of
recycable
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recyclable
 products may be increased
instead
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 of
non-recycable
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non-recyclable
 ones. By
this
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 means, the waste of human
activites
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activities
 can be degradable and sustainable in the environment. In conclusion,
humanity
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 has become the greatest threat to
the
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apply
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nature and other lives.
However
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, if we take some measures, we may decrease
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this
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the
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 impact of
humanity
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 over the years and save the species in danger of extinction.

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task management
Plan your essay with two clear parts: why this has happened and how we can cut the harm. Use one idea per paragraph and link them well.
coherence
Make clear topic sentences. Each paragraph should have a main idea that matches the task.
coherence
Use linking words (and, but, so, also, first, next, finally) to show how ideas fit.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar to make meaning clear.
lexis
Use plain words from the top 100 and avoid long or hard words.
content
The essay talks about both why and how to act.
structure
There is a clear plan with an intro, body and conclusion.
ideas
Some good ideas are given, like awareness and recycled goods.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • habitat destruction
  • biodiversity
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • overexploitation
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable agriculture
  • forestry
  • pollution controls
  • waste management
  • conservation efforts
  • protected areas
  • environmental contamination
  • sustainable lifestyles
  • policy changes
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