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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measure and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

In the prevailing era, global warming has become a grimmer problem around the world. People are facing tremendous problems
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 it.
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 essay will not only discuss the causative factors behind
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 scenario, but some measures will
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 be highlighted to mitigate the issue. Commencing with the most salient reason
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 global warming is deforestation. The number of trees is chopped down every year for the purpose of urban development and agricultural land.
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 phenomenon is responsible for increasing the temperature on the
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that
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 leads to global warming.
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, in India, the temperature in the summer is rising every year, and the main reason behind
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 is forest conversion.
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, imposing some strict laws by the government and planting more trees by individuals could solve the issue. If a law is introduced by authorities
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 which cutting down the forest
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. Severe punishment should be given to them if locals try to cut down the forest.
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, every individual on the earth should plant five trees in a year
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 can help to control the temperature on the earth. In
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 way, the global warming problem can be solved.
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,
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 deforestation is the main culprit behind
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 scenario,
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 impediment cannot be solved unless the government and people can work together to eliminate the
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structural
Plan and make sure the essay has a clear view in the first line, and restate it in the end.
content
Add more ideas on what causes global warming, not only deforestation. Mention cars, factories, and energy use.
coherence
Use linking words and phrases to join ideas and to move from one part to the next.
language
Use clear grammar and short sentences; avoid big errors that hide the meaning.
examples
Give more than one example or piece of evidence to back a point.
structure
The essay has a clear two‑part plan: cause and cure.
content
It uses a real example (India) to back a point.
style
The writing is easy to read with simple words.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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