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The development of tourism has a significant impact on local communities. Do you think the advantages of tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

The development of
tourism
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 a significant impact on local communities in recent years.
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 essay will discuss the key advantages and disadvantages of
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 phenomenon before evaluating whether the economic benefits ultimately outweigh the cultural and environmental drawbacks.
Tourism
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 supports employment opportunities
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 economic development.
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, with the rise of
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, diverse jobs are created for local residents,
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 as entertainers, local guides for cultural sightseeing, or hotel staff to accommodate the increasing waves of
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.
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, these jobs generate significant earnings and tax revenue for the commune, which in
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 can be invested in local
infrastructure
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 and public services. To close the circle, better
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 and improved public services attract more
tourists
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 and open up more job
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.
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, more
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 leads to more jobs, better
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, and ultimately more comfort for locals.
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, booming
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 comes at the expense of cultural commodification and can cause the environment to suffer greatly.
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, ancient sites like Chichen Itza are flooded with vendors selling souvenirs to passing
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, which pushes the original meaning of the pyramid into the background. Not only that, but
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 often leave their trash everywhere, acting as if they are the
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 ones visiting.
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 leads to irreversible environmental damage, which is exacerbated by heavy
infrastructure
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 like hotels and holiday resorts. On top of all
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, social cohesion and local communities erode
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 the greed for
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' money and rising costs everywhere. In summary,
tourism
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 often destroys past culture and present communities for the personal gain of a few local individuals. In conclusion,
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 increasing
tourism
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 offers clear economic benefits and boosts job opportunities, it comes at the expense of local culture and the environment. In my opinion,
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tourism
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 can help a country escape poverty, it
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 poses a high risk of losing its cultural reputation.

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The essay shows both sides and has a clear end.
structure
It uses a simple plan with an intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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There is a clear view on the effect of tourism on jobs and money.

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