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he table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

he table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
This
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 table illustrates how the
police
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budget
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 was provided in one region of the United Kingdom from 2017 to 2018. These charts depict the percentage of
money
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,
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 which was spent on different aspects over the
two
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years
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the National Government paid the largest amount of
money
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 in
two
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years
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. The highest proportion of the
money
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 was spent on salaries of officers and staff during that period. The National Government made a huge
budget
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 for the
police
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 in one area of Britain in
two
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years
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, which was 175.5m and 177.8m, respectively.
Moreover
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, local taxes accounted for about 91.2 in 2017.
In contrast
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, they showed a dramatic growth in 2018 and reached 102.3m.
In addition
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, other sources provided around 38.0m in those
years
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. More than 3 fourth of the amount of
money
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 was distributed for salaries in 2017,
while
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this
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 payment decreased to 69% in 2018.
Furthermore
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, less than 10% of the
budget
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 was paid to technology in 2017, and
this
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 figure changed to 14% in 2018. Apart from that, building and transport received an equal amount of
money
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 in
two
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years
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. All in all,
it is clear that
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 the National Government had a significant role in the
police
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budget
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, and most of the allocations were consumed for
police
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 personnel’s income.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, two, years, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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