The news media have too much influence on peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

THERE IS NO DENYING THE FACT THAT, NOWADAYS, SOCIAL
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HAS A SIGNIFICANT ROLE IN OUR LIVES ,AND
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CAN BE NEGATIVE AND POSITIVE AT THE SAME TIME. IN
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ESSAY, I TEND TO DISCUSS THE PROS AND THE CONS
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, I WILL EXPRESS MY OPINION. ON ONE HAND, THE
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MEDIA
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HAVE A PRIMARY PART IN INDIVIDUALS' DAY ,WHICH INFLUENCES ON HOW PEOPLE THINK AND ACT.
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, YOU MIGHT SEE SEVERAL SPOUSES CLAIMING THAT THEY DO NOT TAKE THEIR RIGHTS FROM EACH OTHER, BASED ON WHO THEY FOLLOWED ON SOCIAL
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AS INFLUENCERS
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AND ARTISTS . SO, WHATEVER THE FAMOUS DO, THEY WILL COPY IT AND DREAM ABOUT IT.
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, THEY WANT THEIR LIFE OR THE EXACT LIFE.
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, THESE ACCOUNTS
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ALSO CAN AFFECT OUR
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CHILDREN, ALTERING THEIR THINKING ABOUT OUR CULTURE AND HERITAGE.
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, I CONCUR WITH
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CONCEPT BASED ON MY EXPERIENCE.
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, DISPITE THE DRAWBACKS OF THE
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MEDIA
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, WE CAN NOT DENY THE BENEFITS OF IT. SOCIAL
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AND ITS
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FACILITATE THE WAYS TO ACCESS THE INFORMATION AND,
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, IT CAN BE AN OPTION FOR LEARNING NEW SKILLS LIKE
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DRAWING, COOKING , AND MAKE-UP.
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, MY SISTER HAS NEVER COOKED SINCE SHE LEARNED HOW TO COOK FROM YOUTUBE AND SNAPCHAT. SO,
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I CAN UNDERSTAND THE POINT OF THE QUESTION, I CAN NOT DENY ITS PROS. TO NUTSHELL,
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HAVE BOTH NEGATIVE AND POSITIVE DEVELOPMENT
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AS
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DESTROYING THE RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN THE COUPLES AND
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THE GLANCE OF THE CHILDREN ON THEIR CULTURE AND HERITAGE. WITH REGARD TO THE PROS
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A RAPID SOURCE OF INFORMATION AND AN OPTION FOR LEARNING. TH SO WE SHOULD BALANCE OUR USAGE OF IT AND AVOID COPING WITH EVERYTHING. BECAUSE ALL PEOPLE HAVE DIFFERENT CIRCUMSTANCES.

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task
State a clear view at the start and keep it through the essay. In this task you should show how much you agree or disagree.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a simple line that tells what the paragraph is about.
language
Use basic and common words. Check grammar and spelling so sentences are easy to read.
content
The essay shows effort to discuss both sides of the issue.
structure
There are real examples from daily life (news and social media) to back ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • life
  • today
  • agree
  • disagree
  • extent
  • much
  • too
  • can
  • should
  • good
  • bad
  • help
  • harm
  • think
  • know
  • use
  • read
  • see
  • hear
  • true
  • false
  • fact
  • source
  • time
  • way
  • plan
  • care
  • share
  • learn
  • idea
  • change
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