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The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about
internet
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 access in residential
area
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areas
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 in European countries between 1999 to 2004.
Overall
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,
internet
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 communication
were
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 more popular among households in major European Urban and rural
communit
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communities
 during the period.
To begin
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 with, in 1999, more than 15 per
cent
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urban
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of urban
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settlement
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settlements
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 subscribed
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internet
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to internet
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connection
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connections
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. It increased almost twice in 2000 and continued to grow to 40 per
cent
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 in 2001. The popularity of
internet
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 connection increased to 50 per
cent
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consumers
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of consumers
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 and evidently gained more than 5 per
cent
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 in the
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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period to
became
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become
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 55 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, demand
of
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for
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internet
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 access in rural
settlement
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settlements
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 showed
same
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the same
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 pattern as urban/suburban
household
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households
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.
Although
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less
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fewer
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 than e per
cent
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of household
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household
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households
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 had access to
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internet
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the internet
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 in 1999, it began to grow slightly to approximately 5 per
cent
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 in 2000.
Furthermore
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, demands surged significantly and
achieved
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reached
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 around 35 per
cent
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 of
internet
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 consumers in rural
area
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areas
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in
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at
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 the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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