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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows how
electricity
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 is made in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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.
Overall
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, the process happens in two main times, during the day and during the night.
Water
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 moves between two reservoirs to make and save
electricity
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. In the daytime,
water
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 from a river is kept in a high-level reservoir behind a dam. When the intake is open,
water
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 goes down through a tunnel to the
power
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station
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. The force of
water
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 moves the turbines, and the generator produces
electricity
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. After that, the
electricity
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 is sent by
power
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 lines to the national grid. The
water
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then
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 flows down into a low-level reservoir. At night, the process is different. The intake is closed, and the turbines are used to pump the
water
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 back from the low-level reservoir to the high-level one.
This
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 keeps the
water
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 ready for the next day to make more
electricity
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. In summary, the hydroelectric
power
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station
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 uses the same
water
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 again and again. It makes
electricity
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 in the day and saves energy at night by pumping
water
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 back up.The diagram below shows how
electricity
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 is generated in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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.
Summarize
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 the information by selecting and reporting the main features and
make
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making
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 comparisons where relevant.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, station, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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