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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classronn teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

Recently, the
technology
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 tools are
plying
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playing
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a
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 important role.
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, some
students
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 use them and find them
the
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 good resource to
ied
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lead
 them in whatever they want.
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 some people believe and others don't, from my perspective, I
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 that a balanced approach
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 First of all, the AI
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 helpful and can alternate the tutor.
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 and it will respond directly
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while
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. while
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 some
students
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 send questions in free hours for teachers and get them time to respond, the AI
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 than
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they
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are.
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 The schools and universities can
purchase
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distribute
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 them to their
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it
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also
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it
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which
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 will
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also save
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 money because it affordable.
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, the teachers
have
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less
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fewer
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 mistakes, if we compare them with AI.
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Also
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 we can't replace all of them because we need them to give the
informations
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information
 to the
technology
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 and check them constantly.
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Moreover
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 the
technology
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retire
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replace
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 the tutor earlier than
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 past.
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apply
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graduates
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students
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, whose preferred educational jobs will suffer, because there are no career opportunities available for them. In conclusion, the
technology
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useful
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 and has benefits
but
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, but
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 we can't replace and depend on it
even
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it
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though it
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save
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saves
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 time and money for education. The
students
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 will be more comfortable with teachers and contacts
face to face
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face-to-face
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.

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structure
Plan before you write. Start with a clear view, then add two or three ideas with why and how.
thesis
State your view clearly. If you choose a balanced view, say it in the first sentence and restate it at the end.
cohesion
Use simple linking words for order: first, also, but, and then, finally.
content
Give more exact examples. For example, name a tool and show how it helps a class.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Use short, simple sentences to avoid errors.
content
The essay shows some ideas of not to replace teachers with tech.
structure
Conclusion gives a warning not to rely on tech alone.
cohesion
The 'on the other hand' idea links show contrast.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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