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Some people believe that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era as all writing can be stored electronically. Others think that printed books still play an important role. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some individuals claim that physical
books
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 are not prevalent anymore in
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era
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era,
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 where all of
literature
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the literature
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could
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can
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 be stored online. Others
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suggest
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 that old printed
books
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 still have it's important role. In my opinion, I tend to believe that
old fashioned
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old-fashioned
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books
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 should yet to be forgotten. On the one hand, E-
books
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 are the evolution of
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books
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books,
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 where
it
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they
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 can be accessed infinitely and perpetually if the user has a smart device
that is
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 connected to the Internet. Many forums and websites have been created to encourage people to read
book
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books
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 digitally and
completly
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completely
 free.
For instance
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,
a
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apply
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notable ones are Vogue- the news bulletin of fashion and perfumery, Thames- the most famous news department, which
both
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of
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apply
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them
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apply
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are
available
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both available
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 on the internet with free access
allowing
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, allowing
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 people to learn news daily.
Thus
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, it is a vast advancement
compare
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compared
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 to
it's
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its
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 predecessors, which are the physical
books
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.
On the other hand
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,
books
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 are the oldest way of
connect
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connecting
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 individuals
toghether
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together
 and
its
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it's
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became
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become
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 a tradition for us humans.
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Therefore
,taking
this
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 custom away not only
is stepping
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steps
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 on our own roots but
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also
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is also
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 a shame
of losing
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to lose
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 the beauty of history that we have built.
Moreover
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,
books
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 have been a crucial part of our daily life, where we use
books
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 to read, learn and sometimes as a reason to flex or to procrastinate. It is an escape for folks who love reading and feeling the sensation of
papers
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paper
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. All and all, it is indubitably not a wise choice
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to replace
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 our own tradition with something more contemporary. In conclusion, there
are
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is
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 a dispute between traditional
books
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 should be replaced with digital ones
and
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, and
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 it should not be since it still plays an important role. In my point of view, I fancy the fact that
books
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 should not be replaced with prevalent ones
with
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apply
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full of flaws and
adaptions
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adaptations
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 like E-
Books
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.

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task response
State a clear position in the introduction and keep it in the end. Do not change your mind in the last line.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and end with a link to the next idea.
grammar accuracy
Use simple, correct grammar and spell common words right. Read the text aloud to catch errors.
examples
Choose real, simple examples and use them to show your point. Do not use wrong facts.
coherence
Use basic link words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'so' to show how ideas connect.
overall
The essay tries to cover both views and has a closing.
coherence
There are clear attempts of linking with 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized access
  • carry thousands of books in a single device
  • eliminating the need for physical storage space
  • environmentally friendly
  • reduce the carbon footprint
  • adjustable font sizes
  • integrated dictionaries
  • enhance the reading experience
  • tangible experience
  • distinct smell of paper
  • do not rely on electronic devices
  • battery life or device malfunctions
  • perception of greater legitimacy and trustworthiness
  • academic circles
  • extensive reading materials
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