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Band 4

All cars that burn fossil fules should be banned and electirc cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree

Most people
use
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cars
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 in their lives, whether it's electric or gas,
while
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 some people agree that we should
banned
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ban
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 fossil
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fules
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fuel
cars
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. I believe that we
should't
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shouldn't
banned
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ban
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 fossil
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fules
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fuel
cars
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, for two reasons
one
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: one
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the
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, the
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 flexibility it
provide
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provides
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and
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, and
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it's
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its
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 major role in the world.
To begin
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 with, how it easy to
use
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 and how it can be afordable for all types of human, like if you were rich or even poor you can buy a car dispites your income,
while
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 in electric
cars
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 it would be expensive and difficult to
use
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,
in addition
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 to that it's hard to charge an electric car sometimes it can take around half day 12 hours to charge full,
while
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 in
fules
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cars
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 it will only take 5 mintues or less to be full.
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I have seen someone talk about
this
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 issue in the social
meadia
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media
 and he said you won't be able to travel for long
dintace
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distance
 unless you make sure the roads
contains
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contain
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 stations that have electric charge. Second point
,
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apply
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 is that all world
are
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is
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 using fossil
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fules
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fuels
wether
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whether
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 in their
cars
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 or even other things
such
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 as planes, trains , and ships. So
it
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it's
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 hard to stop using one item but
sill
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still
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use
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 the other because
its
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it's
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 important, or you don't care
of
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about
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.
Furthermore
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, it is not easy to stop providing
fossils
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fossil
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cars
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 , after the high
demaned
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demand
of
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for
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 it in the world,
for
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instance
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instance,
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 I
use
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 my car to go to university
and
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, and
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 most of the students
does
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do
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, if we were only capable of using
electric
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electric,
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 no one would be able to go, and the other
opition
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option
 is
buese
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business
which
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, which
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also
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consume
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consumes
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 fossil
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fules
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fuels
. In conclusion, I think we still need fossil
cars
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, for several reasons, and
how
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it's the people in their lives.

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task
Make your view clear in the main line and keep a calm, simple tone throughout the essay.
task
Add more clear reasons and use simple facts or real details to back them up.
coherence
Use easy link words to join ideas, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'for example'.
coherence
Keep each paragraph to one idea and end with a short sentence to finish the idea.
coherence
Check that you spell key words right and fix grammar so sentences can be read well.
strength
The essay shows a clear view on the topic.
strength
There are more than one reason and some examples.
strength
Some attempts to give reasons and examples are seen.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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