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the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The map illustrates two possible supermarket
placement
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 in the
town
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 of
Galsdon
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the largest proportion of
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town
Correct article usage
the town
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comprised
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comprises
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for
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apply
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industrial areas,
while
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 the
town
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 centre and rural
town
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 called Hindon are available for
supermarket
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a supermarket
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. In detail, housing for residents
located
Verb problem
is located
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 in the north and the south of the
town
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 and most areas of the
Galsdon
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contains
Correct subject-verb agreement
contain
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 industrial facilities.
Firstly
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,
possible
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a possible
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 site for the market in the city centre surrounded by
the
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apply
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industry and
remained
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located
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 near
to
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apply
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the Brandson road, which has
population
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a population
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with
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of
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about15,000
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about 15,000
.
Then
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, there is a
town
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Called
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called
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 Cransdon, 25 km
far
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apply
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from the central area with the largest ratio of
Galsdon
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, by around 29,000.
Additionally
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, the metro
is passing
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passes
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from
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through
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 the centre.
On the other hand
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, the second option
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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planned
Verb problem
is planned
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 to be
constructed
Punctuation problem
constructed,
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 is in the countryside, 12 km
near to
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from
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the
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apply
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Hindon,
shares
Verb problem
serving
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 10,000 people
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from of
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of all
Correct word order
all of
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Galsdon
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.
Moreover
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, the supermarket will
located
Verb problem
be located
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 between the main road and the railway.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, galsdon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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