The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

The given pie charts illustrate total annual world

electricity

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production and energy utilisation in 7 different categories.

Overall

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, oil, coal and gas were the 3 biggest energy

consumption

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consumers

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, and coal was the biggest

electricity

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generation material.

Additionally

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electricity

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generation

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from

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gas, nuclear and hydro had roughly the same percentage. Usage of oil had the biggest ratio, 34.3%, but it dramatically fell to 6.7% in terms of production.

Likewise

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, combustible renewables and waste consumption had 10.6%, yet there was no contribution to generation. Gas

consumed

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consumption was

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approximately 21%, and it

nearly remained

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remained nearly

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stable

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20% production. Coal used 25% but it generated 40% of the total energy.

Furthermore

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, coal was the biggest

electricity

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generator

last

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year.

Similarly

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. Both hydro, 2.2%, and nuclear, 6.5%, energies

utilised

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were utilised

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;

then

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they approximately created 30% of the total

electricity

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. Like the others,

other

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the other

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uncategorized sources' creativity of the

electricity

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,2.1%, was higher than its utilisation, 0.4%.

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Oct 9, 2025

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

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