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Writing Samples
Band 3

To what extent has the internet made life more convinient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
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modernized
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modernised
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 era, the importance of the
Internet
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 has grown substantially in many sectors. Many people believe that
this
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 modern network created a
convinient
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convenient
life style
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lifestyle
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. I firmly agree with that and will discuss it in
this
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eassay
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essay
. On the one hand, Students are highly relying on the
internet
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 in their studies, it is
saving
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their
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them
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 time
as well as
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avoiding
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the
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apply
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possible traffic on their way.
For instance
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, online tutoring has
becoming
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become
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 very popular and desirable, not only for high school students, but
also
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 the undergraduate and graduate too. Since tutoring is a service
can
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that can
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 be provided by many educated professionals, it is
so
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apply
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easy to be exchanged between a student in a
western
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Western
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 country and a tutor in
the
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an
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 Asian
side
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country
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.
On the other hand
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, Companies and
organization
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organisations
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 considered computers as
major
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a major
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 element for every employee. It is an essential tool for all
kind
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kinds
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 of work. The pandemic that happened in 2020
proof
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proved
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 to the world that many jobs can be accomplished without
a
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an
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actuall
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actual
 place for the employee.
s
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apply
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For illustration, various companies in the
united states
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United States
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 of America have shut down
the companies
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their
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physically
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physical
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and
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offices and
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 continued their duties at home
with out
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without
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 the need for
the
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apply
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offices.
Due to
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 the
internet
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 presence, the urgent need for people to meet in person is getting limited.
To sum up
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, I strongly agree with the statement
of
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that
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 the
internet
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 is making our lives much easier. Due
the
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to the
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 provided examples from my own experiences.

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task response
State a clear view at the start. Use one sentence to show what you will talk about.
coherence
Use a new paragraph for each idea. Start with a topic sentence.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', 'however', and 'for example'.
content
Give more detail for your examples. Explain why they show a convenient life.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use 'internet' not 'internet's', 'has' not 'has becoming'.
position
You show a view that the internet makes life easier.
content
You use real life examples like online tutoring and work at home.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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