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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social and practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagre

In today’s
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 world, many people migrate to foreign countries for better education, jobs, or living standards.
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, living in a country where one must speak a foreign
language
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 can create serious social and practical challenges. I completely agree with
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 statement because communication barriers can lead to social isolation and difficulties in daily life.
Firstly
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,
language
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 is the main tool for social interaction, and without it, building relationships becomes difficult. People who cannot speak the local
language
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 often struggle to make friends or participate in community activities.
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, an international student in Germany who is not fluent in German might find it hard to
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 with classmates or understand local customs, which can lead to loneliness and frustration.
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, the inability to communicate effectively can result in emotional and social isolation.
Secondly
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,
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 problems can
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 cause several practical difficulties in everyday situations. People may face challenges when using public transport, shopping for groceries, or visiting a doctor.
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, immigrants in France who do not speak French often find it hard to understand official documents or medical prescriptions.
Such
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 communication gaps may even lead to serious misunderstandings or mistakes in daily life. In conclusion, I firmly believe that living in a country where one must speak a foreign
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 can create both social and practical problems.
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 learning the local
language
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 can reduce these issues, it still takes time and effort to fully adapt to a new linguistic environment.

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Add one more idea to show both sides or ways to fix the issue.
coherence
Work on using linking words to join sentences and ideas.
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Use more simple examples and explain how each shows the point.
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Clear position in the intro.
coherence
Good use of real life examples.
coherence
Ideas follow a plan with First and Second.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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